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[.50 Cal King]

Well after about 6 weekends of messing around with a few ideas that have been floating in my head, I now have a few chapters typed up.

Here is the Prologue and Chapter 1 of my series.

Prologue:

Spoiler

Chapter-0 : Diary of a Demon King

We have begun our final preparations, just 25 more years and our banishment will end, and the humans will once again tremble before
our might. My armies are growing restless, thirsting for blood, even though I've started hearing whispers about a new wielder of the Sword.
Even my Queens are beginning to worry. I've started looking into protection against that accursed Sword nonetheless.
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My research into the Sword has yielded surprising results. I've discovered that it does not affect a demon's spirit that is separate from it's body.
On top of that it seems that if one releases their spirit it can break through the barrier and infect a human soul.
The only side effect is that it leaves one's spirit weak and susceptible to being absorbed and integrated by the human's soul,
possibly even losing one's sense of self. It seems to also give the human demonic attributes such as increased strength and speed,
sadly all of the human test subjects have not survived more than a few days before committing suicide.
I must look into a way to safely allow the demon's spirit to completely take control of the human's soul and body.
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I have found a correlation between the age of the human and the strength of it's soul, newborns are far safer to infect than an adult.
It also seems to require an exceptionally strong demon to survive the transfer, as well as a strong barrier spell to slowly allow
the demon's spirit to take full control of the body. I estimate that the only ones strong enough are Me and my Queens,
I have sent them to begin preparations for the necessary spells.
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Preparations have been completed and I have already sent my Queens through the barrier, though there was a mishap with Ipas, the youngest.
Her spirit somehow split in two, I hope she is safe. I have given Baal instructions to invade as soon as the barrier falls,
regardless of what happens to Me and my Queens. In 20 years time Demons shall rule the Earth once again.
I leave this world now to someday reclaim my throne.

---Lucifer

Chapter 1

Spoiler

Chapter - 1 : Names

June 6th 1998

My name is . . . not important yet, I just turned 18 last month and I'm just your average teenage male.
My life so far consists of being a shut-in. I'm not that strong or fit, but I keep in rough shape thanks to my job.
And this is the story of how I changed the world.
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Everything began on a normal June weekend, relaxing at home, when a plain black car pulled up our drive way.
A woman got out wearing a standard business suit, black shoulder length hair, and a very nice figure.
I had never seen her before and thought that she was someone that my parents knew.
I heard my father go out on the porch and greet her and I thought that I heard her say something about being
from the government. My father let her in and I could hear more of the conversation,

"I'm from the Demon Detection and Obliteration Squad" she said "We are a special section of the government that deals with
demons and the coming war."

My father spoke up "You can't be serious, demons and such don't exist, and what 'war'?"
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"Let me start 20 years ago." she explained "There was a large increase of suicides all over the world,
people claiming they were possessed by demons, several of which were higher-ups in an assortment of government branches.
We managed to stop and secure quite a few of these 'demons' and they all said the same thing, 'He is coming, the age of humans will soon end.'"
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Even though she never said his name, I knew who she was talking about, Lucifer.
I could feel the rage building in me, a hatred for that name and I didn't know why.
I had zoned out, focusing on that name, I didn't hear anything else the woman said until my mother called for me.

Edited by .50 Cal King, 03 February 2012 - 06:21 PM.

[IamEpicFailure]

Keep going <w>

Lol I type the same thing to everyone.
But seriously, do keep going.

[.50 Cal King]

Alright, you asked for it.

Chapter - 2: Taken Away.

Spoiler

As I continued downstairs, I was still trembling from anger and fear over that name 'Lucifer'.
When I turned the corner into the living room I saw her face-to-face for the first time, and I could see
a strange flash in her eyes when she looked over me.

"So your the one they talked about." She said, still looking straight into my eyes.
"My name is Samantha Thompson, as you might have overheard I'm with the D.D.O.S."

"I want to know one thing, who is Lucifer?"
I could see her face get white as soon as I said the name 'Lucifer'.

"So you already remember that name, I'm surprised its already starting. I need to talk to your son alone." She said to my parents.
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We walked outside where she continued, "The demons we captured told us about this Lucifer and about
his plans, he was planning to transfer his spirit into an infants soul almost 20 years ago. We've been try to
find out whether he succeeded or not, we were able to find his queen but no sign of the leader himself, until we found you."

"So your saying I'm a demon king?"

"No, at least not yet, he put a barrier spell over his spirit so instead of immediately taking control it
allowed it to slowly integrate into the human's soul. Let me guess, you've started feeling stronger
and have become more easily provoked lately, right?"

"Stronger, yes, but its more of a feeling of emptiness, like I have yet to find a purpose."
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Next thing I know I'm saying goodbye to my parents and heading to some top secret government facility to start my
'training' to somehow harness the power of the demon inside me. She also said I was "the ultimate weapon against
the demons", I couldn't help but chuckle at that one. Last thing I remember I was falling asleep to the droning of the wind as we were driving away.

Edited by .50 Cal King, 03 February 2012 - 06:22 PM.

[.50 Cal King]

Here's chapter 3 and 4.

Chapter 3 : The Flight

Spoiler

When I awoke I looked at the clock, 10:43, 5 hours after we left.

"Have you been driving all this time?" I asked, stretching.

"We need to start your training as soon as possible."

"Well I can't save the world on an empty stomach."

"There will be food on the plane. Let's go."

We had stopped at an airport, can't believe I missed that, where a
corporate jet was waiting for us.

"I can't believe a group of demon hunters could be so well funded,
even if you are part of the government."

"Our founder was well connected."

We got on board, took off, and a few minutes later I was eating steak a few thousand
feet in the air. Even agent Thompson seemed to relax.

"So agent Thompson, how did you get dragged into this?"

"Call me Sam, and I volunteered to be a part of this."

"So which family member was affected?"

She seemed to get tense, "My daughter."

The rest of the flight was quiet after that.
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When we finally got off the plane it was already morning and I could smell the ocean that
was just a few hundred feet away from the runway, apparently this facility was on an island.

Chapter 4 : The Facility

Spoiler

The only thing on the island was the airstrip, a few scattered groups of trees, and a fairly unimpressive building.
Inside the building was completely empty, save for a single pillar in the exact center.

"Oh, you have got to be kidding me."

Sam walked up to the pillar and a keypad slid out, she entered a code and the building started to rise
around us. Sam took a few steps back to stand beside me.

"You do realize that this is highly cliched don't you?"
I said, trying to keep a serious look on my face, and failing miserably.

"We prefer the term theatrical."

As we went lower and lower I could see more and more of the people who worked here.

"Don't tell me that everybody here is a woman."

"We found out a few years ago that some women can actually sense a demon's presence."

"Whats the range on it."

"Usually about 150 feet, but it depends on the person. Some can even sense several miles, that's how we found you,
we also have the ability to link our most powerful sensor's together to further increase their range."

"This way." Sam said as she stepped off the platform.

We started walking down hallway after hallway, I was taking care to remember the signs that we passed specificly
where the armory and vehicle depot were. We had been walking for several minutes until we finally stopped near
the end of a hall at a door. Sam pressed a button beside the door and it slid open revealing a small room.
On the right was a small bed, and a desk with a computer on the left, along with large closet.
In the back was a door to a standard bathroom with a shower, toilet, sink, and little else.

"This will be your room, there are some spare clothes and a training suit in the closet, and the bathroom is
though that door. Now the kitchen is in the main hall, this way."

Edited by .50 Cal King, 03 February 2012 - 06:23 PM.

[.50 Cal King]

Finally time for some action!


Chapter - 5 : The Awakening

Spoiler

We continued down the hall to a large room. When we got closer to the doorway my heart started beating faster,
I started to sweat and shake, I could feel a blood-lust in the air. As soon as I took a step into the room I heard
a yell behind me, I turned around faster then I thought I could, just nearly missing the blade that came down right
in front of my face. I grabbed the blade with my left hand and went to grab the the person's wrist with my right.
As soon as I touched them a blinding flash of light erupted from my hand, then there was nothing but pure darkness.

"So the barrier has finally been broken."

"Who's there?" I couldn't see anything in the darkness.

Two yellow eyes appeared in front of me, "Time to reclaim my throne." With that, two thin red lines extended from
what I guessed to be it's arms, and I could hear the distinct sound of metal ringing in the darkness. I knew what they were,
and I knew I had to avoid them till I figured out who I was up against, or at least where I was.
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It had been several hours since we started, his swings were precise and smooth, if just one attack had connected I would have been dead for sure.
I was beginning to tire, my clothes shredded from the narrow misses, then it hit me. My clothes were destroyed but my body
was unscathed, he was toying with me. In that brief lapse of concentration he made his move, slashing at my left eye,
his blade finally drawing blood. I collapsed to my knees, the pain overwhelming, he raised his blade above his head
ready to finish the fight. I could hear him say "pathetic" just as he brought the sword down, a few seconds passed and I
was still alive. When I opened my eye I could see a robed figure standing in front of me, he had stopped the sword with his bare hand!

I could see my attacker ease up on the force he was applying to his blade when a mouth appeared under his eyes,
as soon as he open this newly formed mouth I immediately noticed two things. First were those teeth, pure white and sharp,
they looked just like a sharks, only somehow sharper. The second thing I noticed was that even though his mouth was moving I
couldn't hear anything, no sound whatsoever. They had been talking for about a minute when the robed figure walked behind me
and pried my left hand off my still bleeding eye and held it outstretched, I could barely make out what he whispered, "Remember,
the fate of the world lies in your hands." Just as soon as he said that I felt the blade enter my arm, the pain was to much and I passed out.
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I awoke to the distinct beeping of a EKG machine, "Could someone turn-" before I could finish my sentence the pain ripped though my brain,
my entire body tensed, I couldn't even manage to scream. I could feel the pain coming from my left arm and eye, my body automatically
tried to grab them, but my wrists and ankles were strapped to the bed. The EKG machine was now beeping frantically from my panic,
that's when I heard footsteps running towards me, almost immediately a woman wearing a white lab coat was beside my bed.

"Stay calm, this should kick in soon." She was injecting a syringe full of something into my IV.

Once the syringe was empty she went behind the curtain that surrounded my bed and I heard a door opening, and a few seconds later
she was back beside my bed now joined by Sam.

"What happened?" I said as the medicine started to numb the pain.

"We were hoping you could tell us. All I remember is entering the main hall, hearing a yell behind me, and being thrown against the wall."

The woman wearing the lab coat started to take off my restraints, "Sam was lucky, all she got was a few bruised ribs."

"Don't worry, I've had worse." Sam said, with a smile, and lifting her shirt showing off her bandages.

"You always were a glutton for punishment. Anyways, we're still trying to figure out what happened with you and Alex."

"Who's Alex?"

"The one who thought you were a full blown demon."

With that the woman pulled back the curtain around my bed, along with a second curtain around the next bed.

Crap, that was the last chapter so far.>.< Must write more!

More comments about my story = the faster I write. That being said, if Mum commented here, I would be done in a week.

[iHena]

Pish, you and your demands, I write for the fans because I like to!

[Tuddle]

not important yet seems to be very non-chalant when it comes to some serious matters

"We need you to come to some secret military thing because there's a demon growing in yer brain and we're gonna teach you to control it"

"okay sure"

But this is a great story very interesting

[.50 Cal King]

not important yet seems to be very non-chalant when it comes to some serious matters

"We need you to come to some secret military thing because there's a demon growing in yer brain and we're gonna teach you to control it"

"okay sure"

I can explain this. >_>

I'll force myself to work tonight and finish a few chapters. I'll update this post over the weekend.

Edited by .50 Cal King, 16 September 2011 - 12:21 PM.

[Joker]

I'm interested in this!

I like the idea (so far) but I think the chapters whizz by too quickly. They are good, don't get me wrong, but it's only in the fifth chapter that something actually happens and gives the chapter a certain depth. I'm not saying you should make the chapters larger, I'm just saying that I'd like to see more happening in the chapters (like in the fifth one!)

Good so far though

[.50 Cal King]

Chapter - 6 : New Faces

Spoiler

I was surprised to see laying in the bed next to mine, a blonde, short haired, teenaged girl. She was almost completely covered in bandages, the only thing not covered was her face.
I started to sit up, to get a better look at her. When I did, the cover that had been hiding my left arm, slipped off. The movement reigniting the pain
that the medicine had just dulled, and I instinctively grabbed my arm.

I was surprised when I felt something more like metal. When I looked down I saw something that looked like armor. It had a metallic sheen to it, felt cold to the touch, and it was a pure black.
The fingers came to sharp tips, almost like talons on an eagle, and on the shoulder were three short spikes jutting upwards. On the back of my hand was some sort of dome with a small
slit cutting across the center, almost looking like a closed eye. I was sliding my fingers across the palm when I felt it, I could feel the fingers through the metal, in fact I could feel everything touching my arm, as if it was made of flesh.
Then I remembered my eye, I got off the bed and immediately fell to the floor.

"Dammit, this is why I don't like painkillers. You end up not being able to control your own body."

I started to prop myself up when the doctor took my arm and helped me stand up.

She helped me stumble towards the bathroom. "Thank you Dr. . . . "

"It's Mina, Doctor Mina Pierce." She was smaller than me, maybe 5' 4", her brown hair done up in a bun style, with a pen and thermometer to hold it together, and had a kind face.

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When we got to the bathroom I propped myself against the sink and looked into the mirror, stunned at what I saw. My face no longer my own, where there was short brown hair, there was now
longer spiked jet black hair. My teeth were also sharper, but the one thing I couldn't stop looking at was my still good eye, where I had blue eyes before, my iris was now
black with red rings around the inner and outer edges. It was hard to believe that this was now my face. I let everything sink in for a minute, then I focused on my
bandaged eye. I slowly peeled the bandage back, revealing a scar that was much lighter than my skin. I tried opening my eye and felt little resistance,
as soon as it was opened my body froze, it was was the same eye. The same eye as that thing that attacked me earlier, completely black with a yellow, cat-like iris.
I managed to close my eye as it became harder to breath the longer I stared at it. I splashed some water on my face and for the first time since I woke up, I was standing on my own two legs.
As I was drying my face, I heard a scream come from the other room.

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When I came out of the bathroom, Dr. Pierce was running out to the hallway, and Sam was holding the girl, now having a seizure, down on the bed.

"What are you waiting for, get over here and help me hold her down!"

I quickly ran to the girl's right side, grabbing a hold of her arm and waist, and holding her down. Thankfully there wasn't a flash of light, or anything like what happened earlier.
She seemed to calm down as soon as I touched her, which allowed me to study the bandages that wrapped her entire body.
I could feel the thickness of the gauze, but I could still see spots of blood all over her, the wounds must have been bad.

"What happened to her?"

"We don't know. After the flash we found her passed out but still ok, but as we were moving her down here, the wounds just started appearing all over her body, with the exception of her face.
The only thing they could do was to treat the wounds as they appeared, and give her something for pain."

It was then that I heard a woman let out a chuckle behind me, I turned and the only thing behind me was the wall a few feet away. When I turned back the girl had her eyes open, staring at me.
The eye was not human though, it was just like my left eye, but instead of being yellow it was a pure blue. We stared at each other for what seemed to be several minutes, then her eye seemed to fluctuate
between demon and human. When it fully returned human, she let out an ear-splitting scream and started to shake violently. I could see the blood start to soak through the bandages, it was the largest wound
so far, reaching from her right shoulder to her left hip.

That's when Dr. Pierce came back in the room, this time with a team of nurses. Sam and I backed up, letting them get to work.

"This may be an inappropriate time time to ask this, but where are my clothes?" Finally noticing the breeze under the thin hospital gown, my face turning a light shade of red.

"Well they were bloody, and the doctors had to cut them off you, so I'd guess the trash. I'll take you back to your room, there's some spare clothes there." She passed behind me on the way to the door, "But you might want to grab a sheet off the bed first."

I quickly grabbed a sheet and wrapped it around myself. Heading out the door, my face had turned a deeper shade of red by now.

Wanted : Artist's willing to draw a few characters for illustrations. I would be in your debt.

Edited by .50 Cal King, 03 February 2012 - 06:29 PM.

[.50 Cal King]

I know this one's so-so in length, for the time it took to write, just be glad it's here now.


Chapter - 7 : The voices in my head. (aka Damn, I look good)

Spoiler

Luckily we made it to my room with only a few passerby's seeing my attire. I slipped inside while Sam headed of somewhere. I grabbed a quick shower, hoping my arm wouldn't rust, and put on a simple t-shirt and jeans afterwards.
I looked myself over in the mirror hanging on the door leading into the bathroom.

That won't do, now will it?

"Who's there?"

I was told to protect you and teach you how to harness my power, but I sure as hell won't let you look like a fool. I've got to protect my own image too, ya know.

"Where are you?"

My left hand grabbed the collar of my shirt.

I'm right here. The dome on the back of my hand opened reveling another eye, much like my left, it was cat-like, but this one was green. Now lets do something about these clothes.

Black lines started to extend from my hand, turning the white shirt black. They kept growing even after my shirt was engulfed, moving down to my pants, and building a thick layer around my chest.
I started to see the design he was aiming for in my head, followed by a sharp flash of light.

Ah, I see. I like it.

The shirt started to change again, the right half now returning white. The pants, which were almost fully black, now had a white vertical stripe going down the front and back of the right side, with a horizontal stripe wrapped around the knee.
The thick material around my chest separated itself from my shirt, transforming into a black hooded vest with a white liner inside. Finally a design appeared on my shirt, a crown. On the left it was a deep red and engulfed in flames and thorns,
on the right it was golden and seemed . . . . 'untouched' would be the best word. Even black sneakers formed around my feet.

Ah, now that's an attire fit for a king.

"You're Lucifer, aren't you? Lucifer the Demon King."

You're only half right. We're both Lucifer.

"Don't call me that, we're nothing alike."

Haha, not yet at least, but you'll see we're not that different, future King. Hehe.

I had regained control over my arm when there was a knock on my door. Sam was standing outside.

"I just got word that Alex just woke up, and was asking about you."

When we walked into the room Alex was already sitting up, If it wasn’t for the bandages you would think she was fine.
When she saw Sam a smile started to form, but when she saw me it quickly turned into a frown and she looked away.

“You’re the one I attacked earlier, aren’t you? I’m sorry, I didn't know any of this would happen.” The sound of her voice caught me off-guard, somehow I wasn’t expecting it to be so soft.

“It’s alright, I’m fine now, better even. What about you, the ‘awakening’, as He’s been calling it, is pretty traumatic.”

“I’m ok, but you’re talking about Lucifer, aren’t you?”

It was my turn to look away, I still don’t know if it was from embarrassment or disgust of myself.

“I am. I’ve been able to hear his voice since I woke up. In fact, He’s asking if you can hear Her yet.”

“Not yet, but I do have a bad headache.”

Let me have a look.

My body started moving forward, I wasn’t in control anymore. He held her arm in his gauntlet, as the eye opened on the back of the hand.

"Hmm, I wasn't expecting her barrier to still be this strong. We're going to have to give it a jump start. Are you alright to stand and walk?"

"Yeah." She started to get down off the bed.

Sam rushed over, "Wait, what was that about?"

"We're going to try to break the barrier."

"And that language you were talking in?"

I was back in control, "What do you mean? I thought we were talking in English."

"That certainly wasn't English, I've never heard anything like that."

Alex stood up, "Mom, it's alright. We can trust him."

"Wait, . . . . . .what?"

To clear up the dialog, "italics plus quotes is Lucifer speaking out loud." just italics is Lucifer speaking in my head.

Plus when I add more characters I may just start putting their names in front of the dialog.

[IamEpicFailure]

I've been playing this game on and off lately. It’s pretty fun, especially once you get later into the game (around 2100 or so) when climate change starts having profound effects on the earth. This game is also really hard! I beat the first mission, but I'm still stuck on the second. If there is one thing bad about this game, it’s that some of the effects on the cards are a little vague， thought maybe I just need to use my imagination more!

What.

[.50 Cal King]

Chapter - 8 : Unnamed

Spoiler

"Are you sure that there's no chance of harm for her?" She'll be fine, you just have to remember to aim for the face, she always had a problem with vanity.

We were back in the Main Hall. The plan was to get Alex's demon to break the seal, and protect itself.

OK, I've set your power at 20%. Just try to relax and let muscle memory take over. Now focus on your palms.

I did as I was told, feeling a slight discomfort from the two items extending from my hands. When I looked down I saw two plain metal rods, about a foot in length with a small symbol on the top and bottom.

"Now, among destroying the world, enslaving the human race, and long walks on the beach, one of my better interests is creating new types of weapons. These were the last thing I created before coming here.
I call them 'Lein Du', they're made from something else I made, Chaos Metal, pump a little spirit energy through it and it can transform into any weapon you can imagine."

As he was talking, he was spinning the rods in my hands, making them transform into various weapons, including knives, several different types swords, and even a few firearms.

"Now lets get started." I had regained control over my body, Now just focus on the the weapon you want to form.

The rods started to slowly extend and merge, after a few seconds I had a large scythe in my hands. I let out a sigh, "Are you sure you're ready?" Alex nodded, she was just as nervous as I was.

I took a few more deep breaths then I charged toward her, as I brought the blade down on her neck I closed my eyes. You idiot, don't look away! When I opened my eye, Alex was holding a large
claymore, and was blocking the tip of the scythe, her eyes were back to the demonic blue of earlier. I would suggest opening your left eye now. I quickly jumped back, opening my eye, and was startled
by the figure standing where Alex was. It was humanoid and feminine, but it was by far human. Scaly, pale blue skin, her hair was the same style, only now it was a deep shade of purple.
She also had a pair of horns growing out of her forehead in the shape of a V, and sweeping back over her head. Electricity was arcing back and forth much like a jacob's ladder.

I figured this was the demon inside Alex when Lucifer confirmed my suspicions, then I started to have double vision.
I could see the demon clearly, but I could also see an almost ghost like version of her charging forward, readying her sword for an attack, but she was only moving at half speed. I instinctively formed a shield
when the solid version started at me, her blade moving exactly the same as the ghost, only at full speed. I braced myself, and even though I had a solid stance, I still slid back a good 15 feet.

That's when Sam called out Alex's name, and the demon switched targets. My shield had already changed into a kasarigama, the transformations were getting quicker and easier as I used them,
I threw the weight at the faint ghost of Alex, and managed to bind her just as she started to move. As she hit the floor, I was already beside her, holding the blade to her throat.

She started laughing, "You know, you're pretty good for a human. How would you like to join my legions?" She looked up at me and quickly stopped laughing, "I-I'm sorry my Lord, I did not realize it was you."

"He's not, though you should listen to him just the same. Now why don't you sheath your weapon, and we'll talk like we used to." The chain started to shorten back into rod form, which was then absorbed back into my palms.

I closed my eye and out stretched my arm to help her up, surprised when I felt flesh. Besides the eyes, Alex appeared to be back to normal. I opened my left eye again and saw the demon. I chuckled to myself as I shut my eye a final time. As we stood up she spoke,

“Please have a seat my Lord,” She motioned toward the table near the kitchen. “I will make us some tea.”

Sam kept watching her, as she put a pot of water on the stove.

“Don’t worry, her situation is the same as ours, your daughter should still be fine.”

She snapped out of her trance, “I wanted to ask you about that language you were speaking in earlier.”

I remembered her saying something about it before, “All it sounded like was English to me. Was it not?”

“No, I doubt it was even human.”

“You’re a quick one, it was cemjan duhkia, the language of the more intelligent demons."

"So not all demons can speak it?"

Alex served the tea and sat down right beside of me. "Only a handful of demons can even form words, let alone speak. In fact the last time we counted there was only 15, my Lord, us Queens, and the generals."

I almost choked on the tea when she said 'Queens', and by the looks of things, so did Sam. "Wait, how many Queens did he have?"

"Four. There's Me, Asura, Ipos, and Sytri. Though with what happened with Ipos, there may only be three."

Now I know some of you were expecting a much longer chapter, and I'm sorry, but the story is probably going to slow down a lot. I'll try to write some more, but I doubt this will even make it to chapter 15.

Edited by .50 Cal King, 03 March 2012 - 01:30 AM.

[.50 Cal King]

Chapter - 9: Rome wasn't built in a day. (but this chapter was)

Time for some color, it should help later when there's several characters. Main character / Lucifer / Alex (purple in general) / Any human

Spoiler

"So, who are you then?"

"I am Mara, Queen of the eastern armies, famous for our 'Thundering Brutes'."

The strongest demons of Hell, given control over electricity.

Mara seemed to pause as Lucifer talked, even though he wasn't speaking through my mouth.

"Each of the Queens has control over an element and the strongest soldiers of their domain. Asura controlled air and the archers of the north.
Sytri had earth and the spearmen of the south, not to mention her legions of scientists. Finally, Ipas had the water assassins of the west. We were always at war with
one another, neither of the sides ever gaining an advantage over the others, until our lord arrived."

"He wasn't always around?"

"No, one day all the Queens started receiving reports about a rouge demon with an animal tearing through our armies."

"He had a pet? That seems out of place for someone like him."

"Not when it's a 20' tall wolf with skin that our sharpest weapons couldn't even scratch."

"Fair enough."

"You know, it gets really annoying when I can't understand you two."

"Sorry, I still can't hear a difference between the two. To summarize everything, this is Mara."

"Now if you'll excuse us agent Thompson, I'd like to have a word with my wife in private."

He had taken full control of my body again, and stood up, Mara following suit. She went over to retrieve her sword, still laying on the ground from our skirmish.

"Ah, I guess I should introduce my sword, Leviathan."

The blade was big, at least 6 feet tip-to-tip. It looked very much like a scythe except the blade was bent 90 degrees, and was parallel to the grip, which was wrapped in a purple cloth
crossing over itself for the entire length. Mara gave a quick twist to the handle causing the leading edge to split in half, electricity arching between them. She gave a second twist and the blade quickly snapped shut.
I was caught off guard when she turned the blade on herself, electricity sparking as she brought the tip closer to her right shoulder. A warm glow started as the tip came into contact with her clothes, then
started to pass through them into her flesh, following the wound from earlier across her chest, until it disappeared beneath her skin.

Lucifer started walking toward my room with Mara right behind us. As we came up to the door everything started to fade into darkness, as it slid open, I blacked out.

When I came to, I was standing alone in my room, I went to open the door to leave but when it opened, I was greeted by nothing. Nothing was outside the room, no facility, no island, no world, nothing.
Then I heard the bathroom door open behind me, Mara was standing in the doorway wearing nothing but a towel around her.

I quickly turned away as I started to blush, "What happened?"

"I was hoping you could tell me."

"Alex?" I turned just in time to be hit in the face with an extra towel.

"You might want to put that on."

I sighed, wrapping the towel around my bare body. "Why is it that something always seems to happen to my clothes."

As a little secret, I will be relieving the main characters name in the next chapter. (If I ever write it. >_>)

[.50 Cal King]

Chapter 10, and now the main character has an actual name. (unlike some other stories around here. )

Spoiler

We sat down on opposite sides of the room, me on the bed, and Alex in the chair next to the computer. We were silent, trying to avoid each other’s clothing, or lack thereof.

After about 10 minutes, Alex decided to break the silence.

"I never got your name, did I?"

I looked over my left arm and let out a sigh, followed by a slight chuckle.

"No, but all things considering, that person may not even exist anymore. I guess I need a new name then, now let’s see."

I started mumbling names to myself, but none of them felt quite right, until I came across one.

“Yes, that will do quite nicely.” A smile started to creep across my face. “Call me ‘Fen’.”

"Why that? It sounds like something out of an anime."

"It would be short for ‘Fenrir’, the demon wolf who swallows Odin in Norse mythology. I think it’s fitting, since Odin was the king of the gods, and not unlike Fenrir, I have the
king of demons in side of me."

"So Fen, who were you before all this happened?"

With the silence broken, and us feeling more comfortable around the other, we started asking questions about each other. Most of it was about our pasts, our parents, school,
favorite foods, shows, we talked about everything we could have, for what seemed to be several hours. We eventually fell asleep, I let Alex take the bed while I took the floor.

After a while, I started to dream. I was falling, my vision blurry, the only thing I could hear was my own heartbeat. An eternity seemed to pass before I saw what appeared
to be windows falling past me. I could only catch glimpses of what lied beyond, and I could only focus long enough to see the color, what seemed to be flesh. A few more
minutes pass, and I flashed by the last window and slammed into the ground. Waking up from the shock, I was laying on my bedroom floor.

As things came into focus, the pain from a headache starting to become more intense, I ended up noticing a few things out of place. First, I was slightly tangled in the sheets
from the bed, second, all of mine and Alex’s clothes were scattered over the floor, and third, I was completely naked along with Alex, still in the bed asleep.

I stood up, shaky from the weakness in my legs and the throbbing in my head. I managed to pull myself together long enough to cover Alex with sheets I had pulled off, and
put my pants back on, then stumble to the door. There was a small piece of paper taped to the back of it, with a drawing of a clock on it, the only thing weird about it was
that the hands pointed to every number at once. I quickly tore it off, my head ache too bad to study something, and crumpled it in my left hand. Before I could toss it aside
it caught fire right in my hand, after a few seconds, the fire died out, already through with the paper. I walk back to the bathroom and washed the ashes from my hand, steam contently pouring off of my armor.

I dropped my head and sighed, knowing my headache was about to get worse. “What happened this time?”

It seems that being with Mara has unlocked my control over fire.

"First, that would explain why fire was missing from the list Mara gave earlier. Second, ‘being with Mara’, ‘being with’, you mean you slept with her?! In someone else’s body, no less!"

It was very interesting, you could say it ‘reignited’ our passion. I’m sure even you could feel the ‘electricity’ between us.

"This isn’t funny, you sick son of a bitch. What you did would probably be considered rape in most states!
"
Relax, and take a look at your hand.

I glanced down, my left hand beyond steaming, now the entire forearm was completely ablaze. I took a deep breath to calm myself, the flames condensed over my hand alone, I took another breath and the flames disappeared altogether.

"Fine, but don’t try anything like that again, at least not without my permission."

Very well, ‘Fen’.

And don't think about getting used to this whole 'a chapter a week thing', I may be able to post another some time next week, but beyond that looks bleak.

[IamEpicFailure]

Chapter 10, and now the main character has an actual name. (unlike some other stories around here. )

I see what you did thar!

Edited by IamEpicFailure, 04 February 2012 - 03:39 AM.

[.50 Cal King]

Chapter - 11

Spoiler

I eventually managed to sneak out of the room without waking up Alex, and headed to the main room at the end of the hall. As I entered the room I stopped to look around,
realizing I never got a chance to before. The room itself was about 50 to 60' squared, the walls painted a 'lab coat' white, much like the rest of the facility, with standard
concrete floors throughout. In the front right corner was a fairly large kitchen with a similarly sized table next to it. The left corner was lined with bookshelves, and further
down the wall was a tv hanging off the wall with a large couch in front of it. The entire back wall was lined with exercise equipment.

I sat back down at the table, in front of my tea, across from Sam, and drank what was left over from earlier.

"That was quick."

"I don't want to talk about it."

"What happened? You were only gone for a few seconds, a minute tops."

I dropped my head again. Oops. We're going to talk about this later.

"Don't ask, because I really don't want to know. And you might as well start calling me 'Fen'."

"Wha. . . "

"Don't ask."

I got up to fix some more tea when Alex walked in.

"Alex?"

She nodded, still half asleep.

"How do you feel?"

"I've got a headache and I feel like I just ran a marathon, so like crap. But at least I got something out of it."

She held up her hand, electricity jumping across her fingers.

"Same here."

I held up the cup of water in my hand as I projected a small flame above my palm, warming it.

As Alex sat down at the table, I grabbed another cup of water with my human hand, wondering if the fire could be used on my right. I received my answer as the water started to steam.
I put a couple of tea bags in each cup, and sat back down at the table.

"How much of our conversation do you remember? "

"All of it. Did you have a weird dream while we were in there?"

"I did, and it might be best to save it for later."

"So you figured it out too? Does that mean we, as in me and you. . ."

"I really don't want to think so. So they did, we didn't, Agree?"

"Right, but what are we going to do now?"

"The only thing we can do is try to find the other queens, but other then that, I don't know."

Keep the color coding? Yea or nay?

[Rekee Soen]

I find the color coding to be quite convenient.

[.50 Cal King]

Actually it's a choice between,

Good afternoon.

or

Fen: Sup, dawgs?

[IamEpicFailure]

Actually it's a choice between,

Good afternoon.

or

Fen: Sup, dawgs?

Your choice.
Personally prefer the first one.
Although the second one does make reading simpler.